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EDIT: Fixed all things mentioned in critiques C: Thanks to my buddies who mentioned what looks "off"!
    ______________________________________ Trying out a new coloring style C: I was just sitting down in the waiting room of a hospital and I was thinking "Hmmm, how would it be if I decided to straight-up paint my entry without lines? :0 Never tried that before..." So I fixed that. No references, as usual (I felt daring today xD). I'm actually...happy with the results! :'D Trying some crazy camera angles as well. There are quite a few of them in my sketched out pages. Those will be fun to color o_o Wish me luck, guys :'D I hope to go far in this tourney! No quitting this time, I promise! The pre-story for this is in the description of [link] Zor/Redeye/Calico (C) Zor Ref/1st half comic written in description Page 1 Page 2 Page 3 Page 4 Page 5 Page 6 ~~B3N Comments
 Really excellently done. I really love this new coloring style. I am seriously addicted to how you draw the eyes and shines. How do you get that edge shine at the top of the eye?
Awesome work. I love the first panel's 3D effectness. I also love the last panel where Zor's anatomy is pretty cool too. Great work as usual!  -- You cannot reason someone out of a position they didn't reach by reason. ~~~ icon created by, *LazyMuFFin  Getting a little confused here, first he was huge, now he's not? Weird.
But yeah, otherwise nice job yo  --  Ich Lieb Dich Mari  aww... Zor's expression in the second panel made me almost hug my computer.
I like the lack of lines. the muscles and textures look good without them. -- all unattended children will be given sugar and a free puppy -- "I do wish we could chat longer, but... I'm having an old friend for dinner. Bye." -Hannibal Lecter  + Oh god! Zor rape.
 I love the tears 8D
It looks awesome, to be honest c: And I just LOVE how Redeye's eyes came out in the first panel! XD  <3-- Those who feel everything have the advantage of passionate joy and empathy. But, they also have the downside of incredible pain and sorrow. Like me...  Poor Zor D:
I love your coloring style...is it the whole 'I'm not using black outlines' kind of style...or have you been using it all along and I haven't noticed it until now? xDD Wow... wow swibby!
 Love the style! It even looks a little "vectorized", kinda smooth and shiny, it's really nice. Oh crumpets.. I don't know would I be able to let myself get torn apart in his position. I mean in the end I would have done it for a friend, but I'd be scared, terribly scared. Like Zimadonna I too almost hugged my computer at second panel. You're just awkwardly good at drawing scared/cute expressions. c: Only thing that bothers me on the entire page are his tears in the third panel. They could perhaps look more watery. But this is great!  Will you color every page? That would take awhile.-- "Don't take life too seriously - you'll never get out of it alive!" This is freaking fantastic-looking. It looks absolutely epic. There are a few things that bothered me (the light reflecting on Zor's skin seems a bit overdone, the 'O' in Zor's jagged scream of 'CALICO!' would be more recognizable as a diamond than a triangle), but overall it's one of the coolest comic pages I've seen here on dA.
Wait, I just realized that the name 'Calico' makes no sense for a uniformly black being. Huh... -- Those who will not follow are doomed to lead.  Wow the Art style is brilliantly done! It looks just awesome! I mean wow!
-- I'm Religious so I MUST be a Discriminating BIGOT who hates anyone who does'nt agree with my beliefs and I MUST hate gays and damn people to hell. I live in the South so I MUST be a racist redneck who drinks all the time and practices incest( wut evr tha  Holy gfsgggsfgd That totally beats my PS Elements crap right there. xD No joke.
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Critiques
I love the shading,it pushes a lot of emotion in the panels and adds athmosphere to the whole page.
I love the dramatic feeling when I read the page.
BUT!
Still there's some stuff to complain,yes...im evil like that >.>
On the 2nd panel where Redeye holds Zor,I think the light is too focused on the center of Zors face,where his eyes reflect much less of the light.The shinyness of the eyes should make the reflecting light harder.
Next,the tears on the 3rd panel.They look good,but I think they would've looked better if it wasn't made by sharp,separate lines.You did almost all page soft shaded and the sharpness looks a little odd.
And now the last panel,the only thing is Zors position.I think his head is bent backwards too much,and also the hips look like they're flipped as well.Maybe try fixing the curve on his right leg.
And maybe put the "Calico?!" text behind Zor
Other way,it's still awesome :3
Now I had to read the DA stuff about giving a critique to be certain I did it right and did not mark your stars in a biased fashion.
Vision: Does the artwork present or reflect a point of view, theme or idea?
Poor Zor, he's fighting against the thoughts of agony that he remembers quite vividly. Redeye's eyes are beaming on him and the background glows ominously the same shade of his eyes. I can completely feel him and for him.
Originality: Originality – Is the artwork fresh or new in its style, execution or approach? Is it something you haven’t seen before in its particular genre? Does it surprise you?
You're doing the hard as hell LINELESS approach which is god awfully tedious and also awesomely beautiful. That alone is way different than your usual line artwork. It's still smooth and yet has so much more depth. I haven't seen the rest of the comic colored but in knowing that this will be tagged with the rest, I know that what's in store is amazing from your BS concept art for Zor. I doubt anyone has something like this going on.
Technique: Technique – Was the artwork skillfully created? Does the artist exhibit advanced knowledge of the medium and/or bring special focus to the craft of the medium used.
You've always been awesome when it came to coloring, and your eyes have always been so pritty to look at in your art. But here you really show how you've improved from not only coloring, but also with body features. The angles are perfect and put you in place with the characters.
Impact: Impact – Does the artwork resonate with you or evoke strong emotions? Does it make you think? Does it blow your mind?
Hell to the yes. Such lovely streams of tears flowing from a usually strong guy. No one would really guess that he would have such a big heart at first glance. He's in the sport all for the sake of his friend. Now here comes Redeye twisting at his emotions. Calico's appearance is shocking to Zor and even the background red changes to a dull purple to shows how Zor feels around the other. It's softer... while still dark. We know what his choice will be even before the other pages, or so we hope by Calico's pleading words.
All in all I already said I'm so impressed and ARGH I hate you for being so awesome XDXDXD
Love you tons Ben! Can't wait to see the rest
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