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Why did this page take me so long? D:

*pantpantgasp*

Well...on to page four then!

Zor Ref/1st half comic written in description
Page 1
Page 2
Page 3
Page 4
Page 5
Page 6

Critiques


:iconcrow1992:
Beware,bitch critic on the way :B
Ok,I won't lie,there's some stuff I love on here,and some stuff I hate.

I go on from panel to panel:

Zors arm on the first panel.When I look at ot the bends seem odd,specially when you look on the biceps.
On Redeye there's only one thing....does he have a red eyebrow? xD;

Second panel-awesomeness,I love the perspective.but,the smudges that Zor leaves.
Hmm...would it be possible to move it over the panels?Because as you can notice his finger cuts into the first panel while the smudge is under it,it looks a little awkward.

3rd panel...perspective,sorry but it's the perspective on Zor.It looks more like he's standing than being dragged.

Fourth panel.I love how Zor come out,but once again the perspective on Redeyes arm.It looks HELL long and when I look it looks more like a...twisted piece of clay.I think there's too many curves.Maybe try flatting the biceps,make the midsection less round (it gives a Popeye-arm effect O_o) and move the elbow more to the left.

Two last panels are glitchless and I totally adore Zors expression.

...Are those side notes? xD;;

Great job on here Swibs,nothing wasted.
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:icondoomofraven:
Swiblet! This is just awesome! The hands! And the dialogue! And panel 4! and the saliva in 5! All of that adds up to one brilliant page!! I really love how redeye's expression totally shifts between 5 and 6. The speech bubble is a little awkward in five though... but other than that, I love that panel. My FAVORITE, however, is panel 4. I think the combination of the angle and the expressions just makes it the best on the page. You did so well on the dynamity between the two there. And I just noticed that you box your panels in red... That's cool! Why did I think of that... XDD Great job, as usual, Ben :3
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:icondoctorbollocks:
Very nice combination of humor with all the seriousness that's been going on from here on. The comic look great by the way, just stunning visually.

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:iconartist-moo:
heh heh he is tall!:excited:

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The all that top hat chicken cooker oven hat!

Im 50% shadow demon 25% wolf 15%socks and 10%racoon I've told you too much o.o
:icondiablozero-godofhell:
The background looks very cool. I really like the way Redeye's eyes were colored in the third and fifth panel.
That and some of the angels in here are wonderful. You did a great job on the perspective.

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:iconmech-maker:
Holy crap, I'm commenting. D:

Any, just wanted to say that this comic is turning out rather nicely. I've been following it since the first page. XD;
The coloring style looks really good, I'd say. It definitely gives it a three dimensional-ish quality in many places. I rather like the body perspective used in Panel 3. Nice work, good sir. :D

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:icondragoness-of-night:
Hard to read the dialog but verrah nice work!

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:iconenigmatia:
Oh dear, he doesn't seem to be paying much attention in those last two panels XD
I really like the idea you have here.. another body? I'm digging it :D Now I'm even more excited for number 4 ^^

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:iconanimationfan:
I would know what that would take so long. XD It would take me AGES to get an awesome colouring style like that on a COMIC. I would baww for ages to get a whole comic down with that. XDD But either way, I love it. I find the interaction between those two quite humorous.

I lulzed at Zor. He does die a lot, doesn't he?

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ROFL MY MCDONALDS.
:icongloomyunderwoods:
Haha, I like these little humorous things you put in the text of these guys. :D
And the coloring is very nice to look at.
:iconfudgymaniac:
I love how RedEye's expression changes from fifth to sixth panel. :3 Demons apparently can and do get pretty annoyed by mortals. xD
Why did it take you so much? I'll tell you! Because this is amazingly colored! And those perspective panels? Especially that praised panel four? You know when would I manage to do that? :rofl: Never.
Man, their eyes. I keep staring at them. It's hard to look away.
The only thing that bothers me is Zor's perspective in panel three. Shouldn't he be laying there? :O

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:icondigimitsu:
I like the amount of perspectives you used in ur comics :D and omg I lol'd at the last panel xDD "And stop dying, seriously" His face's rly cute there :meow:

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